Just a quick read of the opening paragraph and a few samples here and there.
(This content is stuff I already know).
It does not sound odd as if it were translated poorly.
Looks accurate. It's a little bit "like an engineer" would say it. So it's sort of factual and to-the-point, but doesn't "flow" as well as really good writing. So it's a fine translation.
BTW, if you're going to translate, perhaps having an overview where you just give the bullet points, so the text doesn't need to be a "nicely written narrative" it's just a bunch of bullet points.